On a beautiful,sunny Thursday I went to Manukau
Movies to watch House of Magic. I went with Fabian and his mum. We drove in
Fabians mums light blue car.
First when we got to the movies we had 30 more
minutes until the movie started so Fabian and I went into JB HI - FI.Straight
away I heard lots of people talking. I went directly to the tablets and Fabian
went straight to the play station 4. Next,we went to go get our tickets and food.
After that we arrived in the cinema we watched
the ads before the movie started.The first part was this girl threw this cat
out the car door.Next she was talking to another cat and the cat ran away.Later
on in the movie theatre the cat found a home and got a name.The name was
Thunder and he was talented and he got to be in a magic show. The owner had a
mouse named Maggie and he had a rabbit named Jack. They both could talk and they
didn't like Thunder. When the owner was riding back on his squeaky bike he had
a box with his magic things in the box.
Very good paragraphing Levi. Remember to kick out "went" and use more powerful verbs.
ReplyDeleteIt looked like you had a wounderful time at the movies
ReplyDeleteBy:Mehar